Saturday, August 27, 2011

Aura..

A story of first love.. And of lost love..

My concentration is broken, and..

Her sweet perfume lingers in me, and her curves I long to feel once again.
I pick up my phone and think of calling her up.
Her voice I long to hear. I want her laughter to fill me up once again.
Her face flashes upon my eyes. Her deep eyes, her soft hair, and the way they fell on her face, giving me only a glimpse of the naughtiness that filled her eyes.
Her eyes... They were her best feature, intense and they spoke to me. I have seen those eyes shine with glee, and I have also seen them drowning with tears.
And now, I long for them. I long to see my reflection in them.
Flashbacks come crowding upon me, and she is all over my mind. I want her to come back! I want to drift away in her aura..


(To be continued...)

It's the first time I'm trying to write from a boy's view :) Don't know how it's going to turn out! =D




12 comments:

  1. Interesting.
    Carry on please, I think this kind of feeling would be the same on both sides, not just boy's :)

    Cheers,
    Blasphemous Aesthete

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  2. i always find it interesting when its from the boy's pt of view..

    well, ive done it before..and now im stuck in a manga im doing..haha..

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  3. It is is beautiful:)
    I could feel the depth, the longing, the want in every word..
    Loved it:)

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  4. I'm almost tempted to reveal the story ahead by mentioning the magic word, you know which. ;)

    Did you ever rework the age? :)

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  5. wow.. how are you at first place. and Love the post.. waiting for the other parts.. :)

    Weakest LINK

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  6. ohh that was a stunner..
    beautifully expressed n lovely words !!!

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  7. Juhi,

    Read 3 poems now. One on Rain was short but very sweet showing strong emotions. Previous one was so sad though with hope but still one who feels love being denied. Waiting for next part of this one.

    Take care

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  8. Well, you did complete justice to what a guy can probably feel when drowned in love and aura of her better half!

    These words if combined with a li'l guitar being played in the background, are bound to sweep any girl off her feet! :)

    Will be eagerly waiting for the second half!

    Love,
    Risha :)

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  9. nice beginning.... a few minor mistakes but the rest is good.. keep it up

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  10. Love I guess has different ingredients for everyone... it's always hard to do justice to the longing of a lover.. some repel it, some get addicted to it..
    nice try :)

    aJ

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Your words mean a lot :)