Thursday, October 21, 2010

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As each day passed
I wished there was something I could do...

As the time ticked away,
I couldn't face the fact that you had to go.

When I lay in your arms,
And when your scent filled me up...
When you looked me in the eye,
And when our lips touched,

...I wished the world could come to a standstill,
I wished you didn't have to go.

But,
The days passed,
You had to go.
You bid me goodbye

And now you are, miles and miles away from where I lie!

Every moment I spent with you,
Are very alive in my heart.

I can still feel your gentle touch
I can still feel your breath lift me up,
When I close my eyes and hope for the time to pass...
When I wait for you to come and tell me
That you love me and will always do!

xoxo

11 comments:

  1. Wow !! The expression have been nicely carved, one can truly feel it while reading. Fabulous work.

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  2. And when your scent filled me up... touched me!

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  3. Juhi,

    Feelings of one left behind penned with lots of emotions.

    Take care

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  4. i will give you a nine on ten.
    a nine because
    1 you can do better. you know you can!
    2 i hope to death you haven't had to see someone go.
    3 it really is that good, who am i kidding ? :P

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  5. I can still feel your breath lift me up.

    this line i particularly liked.

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  6. I couldn't face the fact ou had to go...
    awesome!!
    best one from your side :D

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  7. Long distance is hard ...very hard.

    Keep the TRust alive and you'll see this through. :)

    take care

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  8. Amazingly written Juhi ! :)
    I wished the world could come to a standstill,
    I wished you didn't have to go.
    Loved these Lines.

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  9. Bambi this is a great poem. I saw your comment on another blog and came here. I am a first time visitor with a favor to ask. I feature poems on my site once a month and I would like to showcase this one. The segment is called Poetic License. November’s posted on the 16th, if you would like to visit and see for yourself.

    If you allow me, your poem will get full credit to you and a link back to your site. I would like to use this poem for March. In addition, every quarter I will post the previous four months worth of poems in one large post.
    My site doesn't get lots of visitors but Poetic License is one of the most popular features on my blog.

    Please email me to let me know the answer. Thanks again and whatever your decision, this is a great poem.

    Tom

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  10. I apologize Juhi, I think I came from Bambi's site and because I am copying and pasting, I forgot to change the name. Actually I don't know what happened but I am sorry. Charge it to my head and not my heart.

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Your words mean a lot :)